Amara, I really enjoyed your Nov 4th post on financial gains. You are very skilled at covering a wide area of topics. Covering a wide area is beneficial because you are able to enhance your validity. Amara, when you cover a wide area of topics, you are also very good at transitioning. In your Nov 4th post, you were able to comment on the World Wars and psychology. These two subject matters were very different but you flawlessly transitioned and tied the concepts together. You are very talented at tying key concepts together and making them come alive for the reader.
Your Oct 5th post about Bio Love was extremely well written. The introduction was great and I feel that you are very good at enticing your reader from the exposition. Once you grab the audience’s attention, you are also skilled at sustaining that same attention. Throughout your post you directly question the reader and ask them to consider the key concepts you were explaining. You asked “what is the realistic reason for wanting to be with this person?” This type of question engages the audience because it makes them focus more, and conveys that your post discusses events that affect their lives.
I also enjoyed your sept 23 post about technology and family. You discuss how the use of technology could directly threat the stability of the family model. I liked how you were able to discuss these potentially threating topics without seeming like you resented technology. You provided many attention grabbing facts which glued me to my paper. I would love to see you write more posts because your voice is also unique yet non-overbearing. Perhaps you could “let your hair down” in a post and see if that style of writing is exciting to you. I loved all of your writing and I hope you have a wonderful winter break!
Hello my name is Justin Alexio Vizcaino and I am just starting my junior year at ASU. I love surfing and doing fun outdoor activities. I am currently living in Los Angeles training to be a better improviser. I also love to write poetry so if you like that artsy stuff let me know and we could have a wonderful discussion! Also I love football and the Phoenix Suns. Steve Nashty for life.
Tuesday, November 23, 2010
April Page Nov 23rd Blog Review
April I greatly enjoyed your writing this semester and it is evident throughout your work that you are a very intelligent person. I liked your post on homosexuality in human society. Such a controversial topic can often lead to ill-taste papers and bias. However, I believe that you approached the topic from a very levelheaded point of view and approached it very scientifically. I also liked how you were able to incorporate your opinion into the paper without pushing it on the reader, or seeming like you were bias.
I also really enjoyed your “marriage will fight post” on sept 30. Your use of quotes helped to make your post have more validity. Also, I admire your skill set of establishing validity yet still being able to engage the audience. I liked your discussion on how men and women can work together. Too often posts will focus on what doesn’t work and only try do disprove other claims. You touched on many different points which allowed me to fully comprehend your posts and allowed me to be fully enveloped in your work.
Your Septetember 9th post on the art was also phenomenal. I love how you chose a picture that could have many different subtexts. I think it was a wise choice to observe the picture from an objective and impressionistic view. Your posts are very informative, yet you still ponder all the hidden subtext. You make this hidden subtext available to your reader, which in turn makes me think deeper about the material. This increased stimulation makes me want to keep reading your post in order to experience your valued opinion. It also help me ponder the materials more extensively. I think you are a wonderful writer and I hope you have a wonderful winter break!
I also really enjoyed your “marriage will fight post” on sept 30. Your use of quotes helped to make your post have more validity. Also, I admire your skill set of establishing validity yet still being able to engage the audience. I liked your discussion on how men and women can work together. Too often posts will focus on what doesn’t work and only try do disprove other claims. You touched on many different points which allowed me to fully comprehend your posts and allowed me to be fully enveloped in your work.
Your Septetember 9th post on the art was also phenomenal. I love how you chose a picture that could have many different subtexts. I think it was a wise choice to observe the picture from an objective and impressionistic view. Your posts are very informative, yet you still ponder all the hidden subtext. You make this hidden subtext available to your reader, which in turn makes me think deeper about the material. This increased stimulation makes me want to keep reading your post in order to experience your valued opinion. It also help me ponder the materials more extensively. I think you are a wonderful writer and I hope you have a wonderful winter break!
Tuesday, November 9, 2010
11/09 Blog Reviews
Ricky Kriebel ,
Ricky, I really liked your blog posts and thought that you really cared about the information you were presenting in your blogs. You Nov 4th post presents a lot of good information and I believe you could expand a little bit. In your second paragraph you claim that risk is very complicated but do not elaborate. If you elaborated on why it risk is complicated your argument would gain justification and your post could also become more engaging. Your 11/2 post was very interesting to read and it quickly captivated my attention with a strong introduction and topic sentence.
Tasha Cerimeli
I loved reading your posts! They were very intriguing from the beginning and easily sustained my attention the whole way through. In your Nov 1st post I like how you explored different figures and their impact upon your overall topic. I would introduce a couple of adversary characters that way your argument could gain validity by looking from two different angels. I loved your 11/3 post. I like how you explained all of your facts and I believe that the only I would fix is to add a few more examples. By adding examples, the concepts you are trying to explain would come more alive. Overall I thought it was really good writing!
Ricky, I really liked your blog posts and thought that you really cared about the information you were presenting in your blogs. You Nov 4th post presents a lot of good information and I believe you could expand a little bit. In your second paragraph you claim that risk is very complicated but do not elaborate. If you elaborated on why it risk is complicated your argument would gain justification and your post could also become more engaging. Your 11/2 post was very interesting to read and it quickly captivated my attention with a strong introduction and topic sentence.
Tasha Cerimeli
I loved reading your posts! They were very intriguing from the beginning and easily sustained my attention the whole way through. In your Nov 1st post I like how you explored different figures and their impact upon your overall topic. I would introduce a couple of adversary characters that way your argument could gain validity by looking from two different angels. I loved your 11/3 post. I like how you explained all of your facts and I believe that the only I would fix is to add a few more examples. By adding examples, the concepts you are trying to explain would come more alive. Overall I thought it was really good writing!
Thursday, November 4, 2010
Pg 455 Freewrite.
The current financial theories emerged from the progress we have made in physics. The law of thermodynamics and elementary mathematical manipulations of infinite series have proven to drastically affect finance. I believe that new financial options are allowed to be created because of post war economic stability that was brought on by the conclusion of World War II. The Great Depression was the result of a stock market failure and I believe the depression created great scrutiny on financial trading. With new interest or scrutiny is placed on a subject, Americans have a tendency to create new methods to understand the subject.
“Much of the quantitative work in finance seeks to establish the value of new and oftentimes complex derivatives” (Beedles 452). Finance has begun to evolve mathematically and I believe that another reason for this is because of the scientific breakthroughs. Instead of relying on religion to explain such things as planetary movements, Einstein and others sought to explain the world via science. The new quest to explain the world in terms of science has led to many discoveries in the science field. However, I believe that too much faith has been placed on these mathematical finance theories.
“The study of finance as scientific entity is relatively new” (Beedles 451). The fact of the matter is that we have not been able to scrutinize financial tendencies long enough to have any definitive theories. All of the theories that are in place explain how the finance market runs currently but we do not know how it will continue to run definitively. “Insider training is a problem that runs rampant in the financial market” (Beedles 453). I believe that the extensive market analysis that has been conducted so far was only done so people could extort the market. However, as more people begin to analyze the market and more time passes, we will be able to create more accurate, effective market models.
“Much of the quantitative work in finance seeks to establish the value of new and oftentimes complex derivatives” (Beedles 452). Finance has begun to evolve mathematically and I believe that another reason for this is because of the scientific breakthroughs. Instead of relying on religion to explain such things as planetary movements, Einstein and others sought to explain the world via science. The new quest to explain the world in terms of science has led to many discoveries in the science field. However, I believe that too much faith has been placed on these mathematical finance theories.
“The study of finance as scientific entity is relatively new” (Beedles 451). The fact of the matter is that we have not been able to scrutinize financial tendencies long enough to have any definitive theories. All of the theories that are in place explain how the finance market runs currently but we do not know how it will continue to run definitively. “Insider training is a problem that runs rampant in the financial market” (Beedles 453). I believe that the extensive market analysis that has been conducted so far was only done so people could extort the market. However, as more people begin to analyze the market and more time passes, we will be able to create more accurate, effective market models.
Tuesday, November 2, 2010
11/2 Blog Post Reviews
Jacqueline Pridgett
Your writing is always very informative and it always makes for a good read. The facts you presented in your 10/28 post were amazing and I believe that it really convinced me of the point you were trying to make. The only thing I could say to improve your 10/28 post would be to cite your material and then your post would be a total success. Your 10/26 post is also very well organized and it quickly captured my attention. The only thing I would fix is your conclusion. Your conclusion is very interesting but instead of just making a comment to end the post, perhaps your post would be stronger if you suggested a remedy for the problem. Other than that it was great reading your posts!
Armando Teran
I really like your posts and your voice is always very strong and evident. I like the structure of your paper, but I believe you could transition better. Your ideas jump around sometimes particularly in your 10/28 post. If you find ways to tie your ideas together more fluently, I won’t get distracted from the overall point you are trying to make. On your 10/26 post, I believe you could have a little stronger opening sentence to begin the paper. Other than that your post was amazing and it really captivated me!
Your writing is always very informative and it always makes for a good read. The facts you presented in your 10/28 post were amazing and I believe that it really convinced me of the point you were trying to make. The only thing I could say to improve your 10/28 post would be to cite your material and then your post would be a total success. Your 10/26 post is also very well organized and it quickly captured my attention. The only thing I would fix is your conclusion. Your conclusion is very interesting but instead of just making a comment to end the post, perhaps your post would be stronger if you suggested a remedy for the problem. Other than that it was great reading your posts!
Armando Teran
I really like your posts and your voice is always very strong and evident. I like the structure of your paper, but I believe you could transition better. Your ideas jump around sometimes particularly in your 10/28 post. If you find ways to tie your ideas together more fluently, I won’t get distracted from the overall point you are trying to make. On your 10/26 post, I believe you could have a little stronger opening sentence to begin the paper. Other than that your post was amazing and it really captivated me!
Pg 443 Freewrite
I believe that this country was based on democratic foundations that were intended for the people to rule themselves. The country was founded in order to allow libertarian government to work, but I do not believe that the country’s current government could handle full libertarianism. When the constitution was created the rights secured were aimed at affluent white property owners. The constitution only secured the rights of the people that the 1700’s society deemed were important. In 2010 we have a very a different outlook of the world.
Our current moral standing as a country involves including everyone with equal rights. However, we have not fully reached our equality goals and allowing governmental control to dissipate and full libertarianism to emerge would destroy the progress we have made. “For the libertarian set, today’s encryption technology is the best thing to come along since the right to bear arms” (Beedles 437). Libertarians of today are using cyber tactics to protest and defeat the government. The revolution that Libertarians are raising is counter effective. By bringing down the government, only mass chaos and anarchy could be achieved.
I believe that sometimes bringing down a government is warranted, but not in a democratic situation. Democratic governments are set up so that the general population can dictate the people in office and laws. Instead of waging a cyber war, I believe that the most productive actions would involve impeaching people and changing the political figures. “As more and more business transactions are hidden from the IRS by encryption, Parekh predicts, tax revenues will decrease” (Beedles 441). I believe that we as a nation would benefit if we embraced paying taxes. Instead of protesting governmental control of taxes, we should focus on making sure our tax money is being used in the correct manner.
Our current moral standing as a country involves including everyone with equal rights. However, we have not fully reached our equality goals and allowing governmental control to dissipate and full libertarianism to emerge would destroy the progress we have made. “For the libertarian set, today’s encryption technology is the best thing to come along since the right to bear arms” (Beedles 437). Libertarians of today are using cyber tactics to protest and defeat the government. The revolution that Libertarians are raising is counter effective. By bringing down the government, only mass chaos and anarchy could be achieved.
I believe that sometimes bringing down a government is warranted, but not in a democratic situation. Democratic governments are set up so that the general population can dictate the people in office and laws. Instead of waging a cyber war, I believe that the most productive actions would involve impeaching people and changing the political figures. “As more and more business transactions are hidden from the IRS by encryption, Parekh predicts, tax revenues will decrease” (Beedles 441). I believe that we as a nation would benefit if we embraced paying taxes. Instead of protesting governmental control of taxes, we should focus on making sure our tax money is being used in the correct manner.
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