Jacqueline Pridgett
Your writing is always very informative and it always makes for a good read. The facts you presented in your 10/28 post were amazing and I believe that it really convinced me of the point you were trying to make. The only thing I could say to improve your 10/28 post would be to cite your material and then your post would be a total success. Your 10/26 post is also very well organized and it quickly captured my attention. The only thing I would fix is your conclusion. Your conclusion is very interesting but instead of just making a comment to end the post, perhaps your post would be stronger if you suggested a remedy for the problem. Other than that it was great reading your posts!
Armando Teran
I really like your posts and your voice is always very strong and evident. I like the structure of your paper, but I believe you could transition better. Your ideas jump around sometimes particularly in your 10/28 post. If you find ways to tie your ideas together more fluently, I won’t get distracted from the overall point you are trying to make. On your 10/26 post, I believe you could have a little stronger opening sentence to begin the paper. Other than that your post was amazing and it really captivated me!
Hello my name is Justin Alexio Vizcaino and I am just starting my junior year at ASU. I love surfing and doing fun outdoor activities. I am currently living in Los Angeles training to be a better improviser. I also love to write poetry so if you like that artsy stuff let me know and we could have a wonderful discussion! Also I love football and the Phoenix Suns. Steve Nashty for life.
No comments:
Post a Comment