Ricky Kriebel ,
Ricky, I really liked your blog posts and thought that you really cared about the information you were presenting in your blogs. You Nov 4th post presents a lot of good information and I believe you could expand a little bit. In your second paragraph you claim that risk is very complicated but do not elaborate. If you elaborated on why it risk is complicated your argument would gain justification and your post could also become more engaging. Your 11/2 post was very interesting to read and it quickly captivated my attention with a strong introduction and topic sentence.
Tasha Cerimeli
I loved reading your posts! They were very intriguing from the beginning and easily sustained my attention the whole way through. In your Nov 1st post I like how you explored different figures and their impact upon your overall topic. I would introduce a couple of adversary characters that way your argument could gain validity by looking from two different angels. I loved your 11/3 post. I like how you explained all of your facts and I believe that the only I would fix is to add a few more examples. By adding examples, the concepts you are trying to explain would come more alive. Overall I thought it was really good writing!
Hello my name is Justin Alexio Vizcaino and I am just starting my junior year at ASU. I love surfing and doing fun outdoor activities. I am currently living in Los Angeles training to be a better improviser. I also love to write poetry so if you like that artsy stuff let me know and we could have a wonderful discussion! Also I love football and the Phoenix Suns. Steve Nashty for life.
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