Jacqueline Pridgett
Jacqueline I really enjoyed reading your post and it was evident that you understood the readings. I believe that the highlight of your paper is the application of the readings to your analysis. Some things that I think could be improved on are the transitions between paragraphs particularly the transmission between paragraph two and three of your 9/30 post. Also, I think it would benefit your post if you further explored the reasons that people enter mahogany. You mentioned spiritual reasons and personal reasons but could there be more? Does mahogany benefit social structures or could mahogany have potential health benefits?
Armando Teran
I really enjoyed your posts and I especially liked the relevancy you incorporated in your 9/30 post. I think that you could give more examples of how the media affects relationships. In your 9/28 post I really liked the examples you quote from the book but they should be cited properly in order to add validity. I liked your conclusion on the 9/28 post and the general overall tone. The only other thing I would add to your 9/28 post is a more enthralling introduction sentence to entice the reader to continue reading.
Hello my name is Justin Alexio Vizcaino and I am just starting my junior year at ASU. I love surfing and doing fun outdoor activities. I am currently living in Los Angeles training to be a better improviser. I also love to write poetry so if you like that artsy stuff let me know and we could have a wonderful discussion! Also I love football and the Phoenix Suns. Steve Nashty for life.
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