Jacqueline Pridgett
Jaqueline I really enjoyed your articles. I think that you introduced a bunch of good information and topics. You were really able to engage me into the material. The only notes I have is in your first post, Animal Anomalies, you could have supported your information a little bit better in your first paragraph. You said “recent studies have shown” but you did not state which studies validated the point you were trying to make. I liked your second post a lot, I believe that the only thing it could use is a little bit more enticing introduction but the body paragraphs were extremely solid.
Armando Teran
I really enjoyed your articles and I really heard your voice coming through your writing. I clearly identified your opinion in the post and was well aware of the stance you were taking. In your 10/7 post you provided facts to back up your claims. I think the facts you provide would have more validity if you quoted a little bit more directly from the textbook. I liked the flow of your 10/5 post and the flow of your transitions was very seamless. The only thing I would suggest to fix is the organization of the third paragraph. Your conclusion gets a little bit lost because you are offering a lot of ideas. Good post I look forward to reading more from you!
Hello my name is Justin Alexio Vizcaino and I am just starting my junior year at ASU. I love surfing and doing fun outdoor activities. I am currently living in Los Angeles training to be a better improviser. I also love to write poetry so if you like that artsy stuff let me know and we could have a wonderful discussion! Also I love football and the Phoenix Suns. Steve Nashty for life.
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